I could have told you
of the familiarity of the spoon
in the soup:
of my welling sadness
in seeing the handle skate the surface.
And you could have told me
of what has not been lost:
of the submerged bowl
and it’s unforgotten potential.
I could have told you
that form and function
are still understood
in the milky colloid of the recent past,
but that the spoon stops being a spoon.
I could have told you
of the strange melancholy of literalism
and I could have told you
how the memory of soup
refuses the ink of the spoon,
and I would have told you this
if it was my hand on the pen of the spoon,
and not yours, stirring.
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I like the deep and reflective thoughts….it is difficult to understand this mental state unless your loved one is suffering with it. What we take for granted, are sometimes a challenge for others.
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This gave me goosebumps. The poem. Then I saw the photo. Ecellent writing. LOve this!
The photo , as always came afterwards, but I thought for once, it helped the piece rather than distract from it… So glad you got something from it
‘Excellent
lovely dig on a beautiful relation,
well done.
cheers.
what a moving piece, wow.
powerful illustrations on the image to your topic.
i read it with an analogy to life.. nice
The great thing about the reader/writer stuff is the import of what we both provide to a piece, it’s good you’ve come along and brought and found
Awesome write! Deep and yet not so deep. Very nice!
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Very moving internal dialogue of a relationship trying to hold together what is lost, and even acknowledging the denial of what is lost, and denying the acknowledgement of power lost.
I nursed dementia suffering people for 12years and was painfully aware of the struggle to communicate and understand our experiences. I deliberately chose plain simple words with slightly odd sentence construction to try to convey what’s lost and what is not but perhaps hidden…thank you for your perceptive reading.
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wow. awesome write…if only …great porgression through building this as well…great depth of emotion…nicely done…soup…who woulda knew..smiles..
This is immensely thought-provoking. Really makes you think about life, its complexities and simplicities. It’s ups and downs. It’s beginnings and ends. Really great piece. Just wonderful.
Glad you like….ta muchly for the comment
dang! i didn’t see this ending coming…real and deep write.. awesome!!
I didn’t see it coming myself, until it wrote itself in
cheers Claudia
what a relationship!!
Brian – I too have spent years caring for those with dementia. It is a world of mazes and mirrors is it not?
I appreciate your heart for those who have had so much and lost it!
It really is wonderful to encounter thought provoking art. I believe it comes from an intuitive poet
Cheers
Thanks for the kind words. Truly appreciated
Brought back painful yet loving memories of my mom and some caretaker responsibilities…brought tears to my eyes. Sentient, simple language. Thank you, for sharing this.
In a society which has reduced to the sub-nuclear family, it is extraordinary to see the number of us who tend elderly relatives…thank you so much for your comment J.
Brilliant!
Have been skating thru Bar-none past couple of weeks….much to be admired/enjoyed there. Good to see your face here…ta much.
Thanks for coming to view my writing. Glad you did or I would not have seen this one. I think it is very moving and thought provoking with a pace that seems perfect for the subject matter nd the overall flow. I also love the idea that the photo is after the writing as I never thought about doping that. The photo does not distract when reading and is the perfect second course. Well done. Brian
It was my good lady , Susie, who put me on to your site, and I’m glad she did, I still get a wee frisson when I see decent writing in previously unvisited places. So thank you, too, Brian.
sorry fingers not working today – nd= and and doping should be doing – damn arthitis