First Course

I could have told you
of the familiarity of the spoon
in the soup:
of my welling sadness
in seeing the handle skate the surface.

And you could have told me
of what has not been lost:
of the submerged bowl
and it’s unforgotten potential.

I could have told you
that form and function
are still understood
in the milky colloid of the recent past,
but that the spoon stops being a spoon.

I could have told you
of the strange melancholy of literalism

and I could have told you
how the memory of soup
refuses the ink of the spoon,

and I would have told you this
if it was my hand on the pen of the spoon,
and not yours, stirring.

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27 thoughts on “First Course

  1. Very moving internal dialogue of a relationship trying to hold together what is lost, and even acknowledging the denial of what is lost, and denying the acknowledgement of power lost.

    • I nursed dementia suffering people for 12years and was painfully aware of the struggle to communicate and understand our experiences. I deliberately chose plain simple words with slightly odd sentence construction to try to convey what’s lost and what is not but perhaps hidden…thank you for your perceptive reading.

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  3. This is immensely thought-provoking. Really makes you think about life, its complexities and simplicities. It’s ups and downs. It’s beginnings and ends. Really great piece. Just wonderful.

  4. Brian – I too have spent years caring for those with dementia. It is a world of mazes and mirrors is it not?
    I appreciate your heart for those who have had so much and lost it!
    It really is wonderful to encounter thought provoking art. I believe it comes from an intuitive poet
    Cheers

  5. Thanks for coming to view my writing. Glad you did or I would not have seen this one. I think it is very moving and thought provoking with a pace that seems perfect for the subject matter nd the overall flow. I also love the idea that the photo is after the writing as I never thought about doping that. The photo does not distract when reading and is the perfect second course. Well done. Brian

    • It was my good lady , Susie, who put me on to your site, and I’m glad she did, I still get a wee frisson when I see decent writing in previously unvisited places. So thank you, too, Brian.

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