Fishing Trip

Posted on July 21, 2012 by Brian Carlin

Wrangling,
spiny, jarred knees
edging up
the wet ledge.
Awkward angler
on the cup’s cusp.
Legs jitterbugging,
scraping up,
empty-lined
successlessness.

And slip.

Spider in the briny
sea of my tea.

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19 thoughts on “Fishing Trip”

Claudia on July 21, 2012 at 8:33 pm said:

smiles on the spider..hope you rescued it.. could feel this brian. even though i never went fishing in my life

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dfb on July 21, 2012 at 9:01 pm said:

A brilliant, if tragic, moment captured. I like ‘successlessness’ too.

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Susan L Daniels on July 21, 2012 at 9:23 pm said:

Ah, fishing. Can be painful. I have hooked my thumb a few times.

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brian miller on July 21, 2012 at 9:28 pm said:

haha…great moment captured…watching the spider do a little dance and woops into the tea he goes…now you gotta fish him out or really just toss the cup…

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poemsofhateandhope on July 21, 2012 at 10:41 pm said:

Fishing at sea is a total pain in the arse….I go fishing down in Cornwall every year- every year the same- its awkward and I get sea sick…but for some reasoning loveit and I keep going back! And this great pen reminded me so well of it… Short, fantastic word choices so well put together….

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janehewey on July 21, 2012 at 10:47 pm said:

a slippery moment. love the way you get straight to it in this. successlessness -excellent!

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ordinarylifelessordinary on July 21, 2012 at 10:54 pm said:

spider in the briny sea of tea – ha, loved that!

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Gay on July 21, 2012 at 11:26 pm said:

What a picture you paint. Fishing where you live must be a sight better than here. It’s 108 degrees today and I don’t want to be anywhere near still water or moving water either for that matter!

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Ruth on July 22, 2012 at 12:30 am said:

poor thing, they do slip now and again… empty-lined
successlessness – I like that and the nice tight write this is.

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Heaven (@asweetlust) on July 22, 2012 at 1:28 am said:

I do like the tight lines specially :

Spider in the briny
sea of my tea.

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Polly Robinson on July 22, 2012 at 2:19 am said:

‘successlessness’ – wondrous!

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lucychili on July 22, 2012 at 8:03 am said:

this reminds me of the french animation series miniscule which has some spiders in it.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Imf62Y5-ZdU

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David King on July 22, 2012 at 9:24 am said:

Wonderful – the type of poetry that alas, is in short supply these days. More please!

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John (@bookdreamer) on July 22, 2012 at 6:01 pm said:

Interesting metaphor and a tight observation

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Mama Zen on July 22, 2012 at 7:03 pm said:

“Successlessness.” I love that.

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Apryl Gonzales Sweet (@SweetApryl) on July 23, 2012 at 12:40 am said:

This steep is a southern summer remembrance for me. Well written! Awkward angler I particularly like

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Mary on July 23, 2012 at 12:55 am said:

Poor little thing. One slip and it’s all over. So often it seems this is the way with humans also. Sometimes spiders and humans don’t get second chances!

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ManicDdaily on July 23, 2012 at 2:30 am said:

Wonderful! I know that tea! I’m not a fisherperson but I do spend time on streams! Well wrought. k.

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Laurie Kolp on July 23, 2012 at 12:56 pm said:

Legs jitterbugging… how perfect! I just love this, Brian!

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